So this is what amatuer writing is like.

This thing oozes with simplistic writing and overly dramatic cliches.

For example, "XIII assassinates the President". As if we're to believe every reputable news organization is going to go put that in all the headlines, all from the grainy photo of a supposed suspect with no other evidence to back it up? In reality I could see something like, "Suspect wanted for questioning about assassination", but I guess anything is possible in Never Never Land.

That's just one example of many. The entire plot and dialogue plays like it was written as a assignment by a kid in junior high school. An assignment that gets a barely passing grade.