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I'm currently Writing my own Feast IV...

posted 15 years ago by !!!deleted!!! (19615099)
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I write fan fiction. Usually I try to stay close to the movies. U've already written one for The Thing 2, Halloween 2 and I'm starting one for Feast. I also write my own stuff.

My version is called Feast IV: Just Desserts. I know, it's a lame title. But not as lame as Sloppy Seconds. It follows a new trail of survivors as well as the return of Bartender from the end.

He's still limping down the highway from the very end and gets picked up by a newly wedded couple. They have nicknames to keep in tradition of the movies. They are "The Groom" & "Dearest". From here I started writing.

I have this idea that The 3 of them meet up with an extermination squad sent in to retrieve the last survivors and annihilate the monsters. It's going to be an all out war.

also, Tuffy, Bozo and Hot wheels will be making appearances. I have not decided the length of the roles yet, but I intend to have this completed soon.

After it is completed I will illustrate a graphic novel style book.

Wish me luck.

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

i like that idea it's a cool story my advice to u please don't kill off bartender i like him he was quite the soldier in part 3.

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Don't worry though. I aint planning that. He's the main character.

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

thanks buddy i can't wait to read what you have in store!!!!!!!!!!

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

rambo i'm actually making my own script as well, maybe we could help eachother I see to be out of ideas i took ur idea of bartender limping down the highway but instead of the married couple i put in that a brown transam speeds down and suddenly stops and it's Bozo, Tuffy, and Hot Wheels they are shocked to see him alive and he gets in the car and they drive off that's where i stopped i was thinking the army could be in the middle of the big city and Bartender, Bozo, Tuffy and Hot Wheels tell them of their situation and all the hell they went to and they work together to destroy them for good and as you said a massive battle ensues.

So would u like to work together in making our own script?

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Great news! I'm glad I'm an inspiration. Did you include the Names, Fun Facts and Life Expectencies like I did? The movie made that so much fun!

My script goes as follows.

Bartender limps into the foreground, say "Goddammit!" as he does wayy at the end in Feast 3. It then cuts to a brutish army liutenant who's out to kill all the beasts with his army convoy. They run a foul of the big robot who killed Secrets and Lightning and blow it to bits. (We find out about that thing later...) The army guy tells them to kill everything that aint human in the town and look for survivors.

Cuts back to "The Groom" and "Dearest" celebtrating their newly cherished matrimony when they find the nearly catatonic Bartender and offer him a lift to safety...The run into trouble!

I've got 3 pages written so far.

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

I was actually thinking today about a new character named hunter he would have a shotgun shell belt on him he would have long hair and a beard who would rescue Bartender take him to his pickup truck and drive off, that's just an idea i'm still joting down notes.

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

I have a character kinda like that, except their name's cowboy and their a female badass. A crew of monster destroyers have been sent in along with the marines (Apparently *beep* in the 3rd didn't look hard enough). The nick names I came up for are: The Groom, his wife Dearest, Yeti, Rawhide, Cowboy, Moloch, Doc, The Judge, Monk and Side-Kick. Feel free to use any of em, though you'll probably think of better ones.

Let's see what you have so far.

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

i'm joting down more notes everyday but i can't wait to see how ur script turns out maybe u could send it to John i think he would love it.

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

Rambo

I'm doing some writing right now tell me what you think of what i got so far it might not be great but i need an opinion:

Feast 4 The Morning After

Picking up where Feast 3 left off, Bartender is limping down the highway when all of a sudden a brown transam speeds down the road and stops and inside are Bozo, Tuffy, and Hot Wheels. At first they are shocked to see him alive, he gets in the car and they drive off. On the other side of town there is a army base it is barricaded by a wall with fibre wire, the soldiers are getting their weapons ready. Bozo, Tuffy, Hot Wheels, and Bartender make it to the city, One of the monsters notices the 3 and they start making a run for it. Bozo tries to save his brother but Hot Wheels is killed by the creature his head crushed like a pop can, Tuffy tells him there's nothing we can do all of a sudden a soldier by the name of Badass kills the monster and tells the group that the army has set up a base in the city.

tell me what you think

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

I added in about 10-15 of the monsters break the barricade and kill the entire army base then cut back to Bartender Bozo Tuffy and hot wheels making it to the city where the army are.

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[–] Cant1968 15 years ago

If Honey Pie would have lived in the 3rd would you have let her live or die and if die how would you do it and if live how would you have ended it with her?

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Hot damn, you're gifted! Keep it coming!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] svenjins 15 years ago

I think anything you write would be better than any other sequel that the Gullaghers could make. They proved that amply with the spicy peanut butt balls that were Feast 2 and Feast 3.

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Well thank you. I'll do my best!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

rambo i decided to kill off hotwheels decide to make it more of a survival type sequel Bartender, Bozo, Tuffy, Badass fight to the end instead of having more survivors in your opinoni what do you think.

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

or instead I am thinking of killing off Badass and focusing on Bartender, Bozo and Tuffy.

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Having the 3 originals carry the show, eh? Sounds great! I can't wait to see the finished product!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

what have you got down so far? :)

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

The story picks up with Bartender walking into the forground from the ending of Feast 3. He says "Goddamit". Cuts to a couple of army trucks driving through the desert. Their leader DENTON is sitting in the passenger seat. He lifts his scopes to sweep the terrain when they suddenly stop at the town. He orders them to open fire on the huge robot we seen at the end of Feast 3 (I've decided to kill it off now, rather than have it be an important part of the story. It isn't!)

The army guys get out of the trucks and their leader tells them to bring back any survivors and kill anything that aint human. A while later a young married couple THE GROOM and his wife PRINCESS (I've changed her name from DEAREST) are on their way to their honeymoon in their limo when they see Bartender staggering away from the town. They pick him up and head out trying to find help.

I know, I know, it's very slowly coming along, but I do have a general idea of things to come.

-Jean Claude Segal has a younger kid brother named "Sean Claude Segal" or "Monk." He joins Bartender and the married couple. He's a skater pre-teen who's just as bad assed as his older brother (That's what Jean Claude Segal was doing in the sewers, he was looking for his kid brother!)

- Tuffy, Denton and a team of bad assed mercs called the The Molochs are dispatched in their huge semi-trailer rig with mounted machine guns and RPG's to kill every last rat bastard creature. They're on their way to look for the HIVE (An important part of the Feast Anthology that was left out of part 3. I'll explain where they came from and their origin, since the screen writers were so lazy to do so.)

- The monsters will evolve and mutate into more ravenous creatures. (If you thought they were bad in the first trilogy, wait till you see them here!)

- P.S. I also have a special surprise for the avid Feast fan. Y'know how death don't have to be forever? Maybe that's true for some of the other Feast movie victims! Maybe more than just Bartender survived!

Stay tuned!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

you make it sound so creeepy i like it, i might as well give up on mine because i'm fresh out of stuff.

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Nah keep going man, the world needs to hear diversity.

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

bud your script is way better then mine I take your going to send your script to John Gulager when your finished? oh and can i have a copy of the script when your finished i would like to take a look at it.

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Yeah, but I also love yours! Keep going, man! And I WILL send you the script when I'm finished!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] seth_21 15 years ago

Just saw you re last UPDATE Rambo , great stuff , i love when lot s of stuff get killed .Please don t make all army guys die in 5 min .Too much horror movie/book kill most people near the beginning .

I m not sure you really need to put the robot in , i consider it a cheap add on not worth showing mentioning again.You could even rewrite the ending if you see fit , the bartender could have simply imaginated it was a robot that killed the rest .Not sure he is sane anymore .Who really would after that long .

You could simply , make him imaginate the army guys as something else then have one of them make him snap out of him .That way people could deduce that the robot was is in is imagination too .

Sorry for my bad english btw .

Anyway , you re doing great so far

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Thanks, Seth. I hear what you're saying! I can't stand movies like that, especially Paul Anderson movies (Mortal Kombat, Resident Evil, Death Race) where he kills off most of the cast too fast. And it usually happens in one spot. His death scenes are so one sided!

But in this script, all bets are off. Any one can die at anytime! That's what I loved about the Feast movies, is that it broke all known cliche's!

Their tag line should'a been "Destroy All Expectations!"

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] seth_21 15 years ago

Why not for once let the cool character live . Everyone expect them to die quick now , what about actually putting him in a situation where you are sure he will die(during a big speech for example)and let him actually own the monster in a big way .It could happen a couple of time so he would get to point that he got tired of the monsters always trying to get him in those situation .Finally he could try a heroic move(fending off monster while the others flee for example) and die .(at least ,make us believe he died in a given situation) .

He could then later on join the bartender that still managed to survive and show them on a long road barely able to go forward .Maybe show the cool character with the same kind of injury as the bartender .

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

allright Rambo i will do my best in finishing it anychance you would send your script to John i know i keep saying that but I think you should.

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Thank God you're going to finish. I felt like I'd crushed your attempts to make your own idea. And if I can find John's address, I'll do it! I wonder what he'll think though. It feels like the budget for this would be a bit pricey! Anyway, it won't hurt to try. Thanks, man!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

I got his facebook actually i talked to him once he's a really cool guy and no you didn't crush my attempts you helped me out.

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Alright!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

my jumpdrive broke my story was on it now i have to make a new one how far are you on yours?

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Almost Midway. It's coming along nicely. It's sexy!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

can't wait to read it can you send it to me through my e-mail.

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

hi rambo

I'm writing a new story at the moment this is what i got so far tell me what you think?

Feast IV The Finale
Tagline this is the end

Picking up where Feast 3 The Happy Finish left off, Bartender the sole survivor, is limping down the highway looking for help. On the other side of town, General Badass has issued his troops to pick up the last survivors and to shoot and kill anything that's not human, All of a sudden a loud noise rumbles the military base The giant robot comes in killing the troops, bullets can't stop it then Lt. Ballbuster gets a bazooka and hits the robot dead on it falls to the ground they look and notice that one of the creatures was operating it. General Badass along with Lt. Ballbuster get in the army truck and continue their mission on locating the survivors.

it's nothing special but i'm working on it but I know yours will be 10 times better then mine.

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

Hey Frank,

I've decided that the beginning of my story needed an abrubt rewrite. Seth, (the commenter above us) was right about excluding the robot. I've decided to reboot part 4 now. I'm gonna just call it Feast IV instead of "Just Desserts".

It picks up with Bartender sitting up on a high ridge above the town on a hill, sitting by a campire (later that night). He's having flashbacks of what happened the same day before-hand. Before nighttime he, Lightning and Secrets were (instead of being attacked by a big robot) attacked by the barely alive Slasher/Hybrid and a few of the monsters who didn't follow Biker Queen outta town. Lightning and Secrets are killed.

In a blind rage and outta adrenaline, Bartender finds a fire axe on the ground, and begins losing his mind, chopping the monsters all up. He survives this attack and lives on...

The rest of the story is still coming along the same, the married couple "The Groom" and (renamed again, from Dearest to Princess to-) "School-Girl" find Bartender, Jean -Claude Seagal's little kid brother Sean Claude Seagal and join Tuffy, another bad assed marine named Denton; along with all of The Moloch monster destroyers and remaining militia to once and all put an end to the monsters.

P.S. I've also created another character who'll have an impact on the story greatly named "Dr. Frankenstein". Don't worry, he aint the monsters creator (That'd be the easy way out!)

The story's coming along good though. The new beginning don't change the story at all. It'll still happen! I promise!

Later!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

nice nice i like it already hey do you have MSN? we can talk some more about it?

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[–] seth_21 15 years ago

It picks up with Bartender sitting up on a high ridge above the town on a hill, sitting by a campire (later that night). He's having flashbacks of what happened the same day before-hand. Before nighttime he, Lightning and Secrets were (instead of being attacked by a big robot) attacked by the barely alive Slasher/Hybrid and a few of the monsters who didn't follow Biker Queen outta town. Lightning and Secrets are killed.

Great stuff , it s allways nice when a story start with some action .The beginning of you re script remind me a little about a certain scene in the movie braindead aka dead alive (you have to watch it if you did nt saw it) .A scene where some guy lose it and start killing lots of zombies with 2 butcher knive .

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

I've seen that Brain Dead movie! That part where the uncle starts chopping them up with his knives looks sooo fake, but it's still funny!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

I'll get on making one. I've got FaceBook.

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

what's your facebook? i'll add you

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[–] !!!deleted!!! (19615099) 15 years ago

It's Josh Nelson in the Calgary, Alberta area. There's a picture of a kid in black and white. Oh yeah, add me up!

"Well I Won't back Down...No I Won't Back Down..."

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

i'm movie critic so when u see that that's me adding u

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

can you send me your facebook link i can't find yours?

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[–] seth_21 15 years ago

It s true it look fake now but when i first saw it i was 12 yrs old , it was pretty much a nightmare .

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

i'm doing a drastic fix up on my version? What i got so far is bartender makes it to the big city and goes into a gunshop and the gun shop owner by the name of Hunter asks him what's he doing there that's all i have so far i'm going to try to get some of it done this weekend and early on in the week.

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[–] Frank_Freddy1985 15 years ago

I'm thinking of killing off Bozo, Tuffy, and Hot Wheels in the end since they left Bartender behind at the end of part 1 I understand they thought he was dead. as I said before my idea is to make Bartender and Hunter (The Gun shop owner be the final survivors.

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[–] Laurapoo92 12 years ago

No offence but your scripts sound more amateur than the actual films, I'm sorry but it seems like you're taking too much effort with so,etching that will never be made, I'm writing a REAL reboot of Feast, and it's not as damn stupid, it's calmer for a while, with mainly nudity before epic gore for the final act, learn to write. Your films suck

Tyler; Piranha 3DD

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