I was hoping to write a story that would be somewhat based on the first game with some touches of the fourth. My question is, aside from the constant theme of war that is apparent in the games, the weapons, and the H.P. Lovecraftian atmosphere, what do you guys recommend should be in the story?
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shareI'm writing something like script. It got three parts. First part is based on Quake II, it starts on Armstrong base, where Kane looses his eye. It's intro. Then it continues on Stroggos. Team of six brave marines battle through enemy lines. In turn they die one by one and in the end only Bitterman remains, kills Makron. While he's waiting for extraction, he see some scared girl in marine suit with gun and gauntlet (that chainsaw thing from Q3 Arena). She say, that she was in the other squad, what arrived on Stroggos, and she's only one, who remained. She cries and tell him, that she runned out of ammo and thought, she's gonna die. They're both extracted and fly away from Stroggos.
Part two follows Quake 4 story, but with one more character - that marine girl from first part. Sergeant Jennifer Dodgers, member of Rhino Squad and Voss's lover (yeah, I wrote few sex scenes to make it more appealing). Story is aimed to all Rhino Squad members (for example you'll see what happened, when Strauss was captured and why Stroggs let him go, what happened Anderson, Voss stroggification etc.). When Kane is fighting with Voss, Dodgers comes through one door to this arena and sees, what happened to Voss, she stops Kane and tells him, that she promised Scott something and she's here to do her duty. She kills Voss (yeah little dramatisation), before he disappear, she gives him last kiss. ....... Kane kills Makron, destroys Nexus and he's extracted and final scene is, when general Harper say, that famous sentence: "You've got new orders." and Kane hears that evil laughter.
Part three is story made by me, it reveals truth about Jennifer Dodgers, who's Stroggs's secret weapon. It starts in Strogg bio lab couple of years ago. Stroggs experimentalize with human DNA and tries to make an army of humanlike intelligent stroggs. But they can't modify human brain, that way, they need. They can't affect human free will. So they make special neurocytes and apply that to human brains. Most of subjects fail, except one girl made up from human and strogg DNA. She wakes up destroy jar, where she's imbedded, dress up marine suit, take gun and gauntlet and go to battle, leaded by her human free will and uses all benefits of both races - it's Jennifer Dodgers.
Dodgers wakes up in her bedroom (after four years after part two) and thought, this is just nightmare. Looks on her husband (corporal Billy Rhodes) and snuggle up to him.
Stroggs are planning to activate her neurocyte and overrule Earth. Rhino Squad regroup leaded by Dodgers and Strauss and travel to Stroggos to prevent catastrophe and destroy activate button of her neurocyte. But not whole Rhino Squad (only Sledge, Rhodes, Strauss, Cortez is with her) is with Dodgers, Kane and Morris fight against them, supported by general Harper and goverment, who thought, that Dodgers is dangerous and she must be killed.
I like the idea of having the story set in different timelines. It makes the story itself seem more like that of a play. I'm afraid I didn't understand the story regarding the Strogg. So they created this special human woman in order to make a special army. For what purpose? The Strogg were already technologically and intellectually superior, so how would this experiment be superior over their current and malevolent designs? I disagree with you about the notion that the Strogg couldn't affect "free will." Once Stroggofied, the organism is another mindless puppet serving the aliens' propaganda machine. There is no proper definition for the Strogg with the exception that they are a cyborg race, but other than that, there is no special Strogg gene. Anything with mass and is organic in nature is likely to cannibalized into one of their own.
Also, try to create more characters of your own. Or, if you intend to use one of the games' characters, try expand on them. Btw, I'd personally like to see a story about Bitterman, who he was, his struggles, both for his physical well-being and his mind, and so on.
Just to let you know, this is meant to be helpful. I encourage you to write it, for it's always interesting to read someone's perspective of the story.
Cheers.
Crap, you're right, but I tried ;o)) I know it isn't perfect, but I just needed woman and this sounded lil' appealin. I hate that characters in FPS are mostly men.
This is mine definition of that human-stroggs:
They tried to made this human-like Stroggs to infiltrate human forces without suspicion. You know, something like double agents. They wanted them to look convicing, they're not stroggified, they're maded up, that's diferent. They've got everything like humans (bones, organs, flesh, feelings and stuff), so their brain is human too, that's reason why they have free will. Strogg can't affect their mind without destroying their brain. That's the reason, why they have special neurocyte (not like normal Strogg has, not like Kane has), which have three modes - human (deactivated neurocyte, so they can use their free will and be like normal human), Strogg (neurocyte is activated, they become fully stroggs, they kill people) and mortal (they become blood-thirsty creatures, who kill both humans and stroggs, these creatures anyone can stop). I don't know if Stroggs have DNA, I guess you're right. But neurocyte is "something" like their DNA, it's the thing, what made them a Strogg.
Dodgers wasn't single project. There are more this soldiers in biolab, but Dodgers was only one who woke up, later there's more this human-strogg soldiers, who fight against Rhino squad, thus, that members of it, who decided to go with Dodgers. And that soldiers are newer, so they're stronger and that's a problem.
Anyways, this story isn't finished. It needs some castignation.
Of course, that there are more mine characters, but Dodgers is most important.
Creating a clone for the purpose of espionage is indeed an interesting concept, but in the case of the Strogg, such a being would be too much of a wild card to keep control of. Also, infiltration itself will be difficult, considering that there won't be any records of the subject in question. With humans-against-humans it's one thing, but the Strogg are so physically and psychologically distinctive that infiltration would be practically impossible without gaining some form of attention.
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