What you think of this script?????

Ok i've never posted here but i am a huge fan of dbz, for about 8years and 5 years db. I have all the the db books and the movies and some videe' and even toys from whnn i was younger. I know a lot about this stuff and i decided to make the start of a script for DB live action movie. This is what's done so far, i think the 1st DB should be book 1 and 2, but ending at 2 just before Goku fly's over to master roshi's place and gets that really fat girl for him lol.

So hear it is and what you think of it, tell me how i could improve it, im no script writer though i've wrote 1 other script Spider-man3, so don't excpect James Cameron work. And i need ideas about the title something bettter then the quest {called it that because there quest for the dragonballs



DRAGONBALL
MOVIE: 1 THE QUEST



Intro.
Black screen.
The screen goes red. A shadow of a long creature appears, we know that it is shenlong the great dragon. Words start to fade in.


For many years Humans have been trying to accomplish they impossible, trying and failing to become immortal, and trying but again failing to become the most powerful being in the world. And until now it has seemed impossible, but Humans where blinded by there technology to notice that the impossible could have been done in less then a year……

During this, 7 balls scattered around the screen start to slowly fade in, we only see them in black. Then the words fade out and two red eyes from the dragon start to grow brighter very quickly until the whole screen is a light red. Then the screen goes black.

We can only see stars, the camera starts to turn left and we see a bright red planet. Silence. A strange yellowish ball about a quarter of the size of the planet is just a few meters away from the red planet, and then the ball starts to move slowly towards the planet. It collides with the planet, and we can hear explosions and screams from the planet, before the whole planet blows up with a huge explosion.

The screen goes completely white. We come back to the now silence of space. Nothing is insight. The camera starts to move around, as if looking for something, and then it stops and we can see a small round object, white with a glass red round window at the front of the object and at the back of it, an engine letting out what appears to be white fire. We now know that it’s a spaceship which is flying through space with great speed.

We follow it until we come to a planet. Earth, fully seen with the spaceship flying straight towards it.

A large wild jungle from a birds eye view appears suddenly. We see birds flying through the air and to our surprise a pterodactyl flying as well. The camera rolls down into the jungle, and we see an old man walking by himself down a lonely path, this man was wearing a hat with a yellow crystal ball about the size of a hand, with four small red stars on the ball so that if you would join lines together it would make a square. He also had strapped to his back what seemed to be a red pole about body length. As he walks down the path he hears something from the side of him, a tree starts to shudder. He looks to the tree and a saber tooth tiger jumps out from one of the tree’s high branches landing on all fours. It starts to growl and gives a loud roar and we get a good look at it’s a huge sharp, long teeth. The man smiles and chuckles to himself. The tiger jumps and just before landing on top of the old man, the old man vanishes. The tiger is confused and starts looking around and sniffing. The Tiger looked behind him and sees the old man, but there is something slightly different about him, he still has the same smile but he seems in a weird way clearer, almost like a ghost but with a bit more color. The tiger not noticing anything and so determined on eating its pray starts running at the ghost like old man, but only going straight through it. Before the tiger can even think about what just happened, the old man somehow comes out of thin air just above the tiger and giving it a killing blow to the neck, which causes the tiger to stager a bit but then falls to the ground.

Old man
When will they learn, never show yourself to the predator.

He then picked up the tiger, with ease and hoisted it onto his back and started to walk back from where he had came. He walked humming to himself a catchy tune {dragon ball theme song} until without any warning what so ever there was an earsplitting crash sound that made the land beneath the old mans feet shake and trees around him shake and birds and pterodactyls of all sizes flew away from trees. The old man look’s behind him and in the very far distance we see trees on fire and smoke rising high into the sky at least 10 miles away. The man stood there shocked and dropped the tiger.

Old man
O….oh m…my.

We get a close up on the mans face and we see that it turns from shock to pure determination. He starts to run with great speed; at least 30mph. T-rexes, raptors, lions and all the animals you can possibly think of start to run in the opposite direction. The man comes to a halt and starts looking around franticly in all directions. Trees are falling all around him on fire, dead animals all around. He runs for a few seconds more, saving animals as he goes and then he comes to a wide river. He looks to the left, of where the water is coming from and sees in the distance a large long waterfall. He swims at full speed, and once at the waterfall he jumps to the side of witch there is land and pulls out his red pole. He places it firmly on the ground and holds the pole at the end.

Old man
NYOIBO EXTEND!!!!!!!!!!!

The poll starts to grow in length flying carrying the old man along with it. It stops at the top of the cliff, of where the waterfall falls down. He jumps onto the cliff and waits a few seconds until the stick has gone back to its normal size and places it back on his back.

We then see a large boulder about the size of a 20 foot house. The old man runs to it and with great force and power manages to lift the boulder with his bare hands he carries the boulder slowly just to the end of the cliff. He then throws it yelling with all his might just where the edge of the waterfall is. He starts picking up cut down trees and placing them around the waterfall. It starts to overflow and a great wave of water falls onto the burning jungle. It does not completely get rid of the whole fire but burns out most of it.

We see the man panting slightly for a while then he looks at the one place in the jungle that still has smoke rising from it. The man runs towards the smoke and comes to a very deep and wide hole in the ground. We see the man starring at the spaceship from the start of the movie, giving out a slight hissing sound, and smoke, but not at all on fire.

Old man
My word, what in the world?

He starts to slide down the hole, towards the ship. We see his hand drawing closer to the ship, shaking slightly then he touches it lightly and to his surprise it is cold. He gives a deep sigh and touches it with both hands.

Old man
Strange it’s not metal

He says this in a whisper to himself while running his hand over the ship and saw an outline of what appears to be a circular door. Suddenly the ship lets out steam near the red round window of the ship. The outline of the door opens. The old man looks inside, but at first all he can see is fog covering up everything inside so that it is invisible to us.
Then we hear screams of crying from the ship and the fog clears to show a naked baby, in a small circular room. The ship is making weird beeping sounds, and then the old man smiled and picked the baby from the ship and with both arms in front of him holding the baby smiles.

Old man
Hello there little guy how are you doing?

The baby’s face looks moody and he just continues to cry. This baby was odd the old man could tell for the baby had hair and a lot of it, black, spiky and messy.

Old man
Don’t say much except waaa do you...ha that’s ok I’ll help you out there.
The old man looks at him and we notice that at the back of the baby attached to his waist just above his butt is a chimp’s tale. The man turns the baby over and examines the tail. Then suddenly the tail starts to move, up and down slowly, then it hit the man around the face with powerful force.

Old man
Ow….odd fellow aren’t you??? That’s ok I’m a bit odd to, to tell you the truth, ha ha ha.

Still the baby screams and cries and trying to hit th man with his tale and his fists
Old man
Calm down, calm down, your quite a strong baby, tell you what why don’t I look after you until we find your family ok? You can call me Grampa Gohan I’ll caaaaaaaaall you hmmmmm how about Goku??

The baby stopped crying and struggling and at once smiled and started to laugh happily.

Old man {Gohan }
Oh you like that huh? Ha ha Goku it is then!!!!

He started to throwing the baby in the air and catching him. The camera goes right up into the sky were we see birds flying by, then the camera comes back down and while doing so subtitles fade in saying,

10 YEARS LATER

Then fade out.

The camera goes on a small hut and outside it is a boy next to a round tree log, we notice the boy has a tail and hair just like the baby’s and has the same red pole Gohan had strapped to his back.

Goku
Prepare to die!!!!

The boy says while throwing the log in the air.

Goku
NO ESCAPE!!!!

The boy says as he too jumped into the air and wam kicking the log right in the center, causing it to smash in to 10 uneven smaller pieces of wood. He lands on both his feat to the ground and we see him picking up the pieces of wood and putting them next to the hut.

Goku
Well that takes care of the firewood…..only now I’m hungry.

The boy opens the doors of the hut and puts his hands together as if about to pray. He stands in front of a desk with a cushion on top, and on top of that was the small yellow ball with four stars, the same as Gohan’s.

Goku
Hey, Grampa I’m gonna go get some grub.

And he starts to walk of into the jungle.


So what do you think???? Tell me how i could improve it so far or if you thought it was perfect and why you liked it or why you didn't like it.

Thanks.

EAT THIS!!!!!!!-Hicks
{no matter what happened in alien3 hicks is alive.}